Tuesday, 1 December 2015

The Park

For writing, the last few weeks we have been writing we had been given a few different pictures to choose from. We could decide what ever we wanted to happen in the story as long as it was from the picture.We had to highlight what language features from out criteria we had used in our writing. Our criteria included: 

  1. Use a very short sentence.
  2. Start your sentence with an AAWWUBBIS (Opener sentence)
  3. Ly start – Start a sentence with a ly adverb.
  4. Em – dash. A dash is used to set off information in a sentence with dramatic flair.
  5. Use speech punctuation
The Park
art7.PNGI arrive at the park with my dog Daisy. This is our special place that me and Daisy love to go to together.

I pick up a stick from off  the ground and throw it over to a big gum tree. She rushes over to the tree and brings it straight back, dropping it at my feet. “Good girl Daisy,” I say as she jumps up licking me. Daisy loves fetch.

I throw it another time, she goes chasing after it and runs straight past it. I yell,“Daisy come back!”
I run into the woods yelling, “Daisy Daisy!” But still no sign of her. I remember our secret hut that we made. She’ll be in there! I rush over to our hut, still no sign of Daisy. My face fell.

By the time I had done all of this running around, it had started to get dark. I had to get home, mum would be worried. I walk through the forest, tears in my eyes, head hung low. I arrive back at the park, still no Daisy. I walk back down the path. Crying. Hoping she would come back.

Suddenly out of the bushes comes a rustling sound. Out from the bushes comes Daisy! She rushes up to me giving me big slobbery kisses.

We walk back in the front door and there was Mum who had dinner ready for both of us. Me and Mum sit at the table and Daisy sits down by my feet. I smile at her and she rubs her head against my legs.


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